Who can give me ideas on my poems. i am desperate for feedback?

I think it's fine the way it is. You're telling two different people's perspectives on the same thing and while it is different it is the same too, this not an easy thing to do. Lol I rhymed! You're telling Evanline and Justin's story, their journey, all that they have been through together from their different view points. I say keep up the good work, don't change anything and I wish you luck!